题目

2009年上海中考英语作文 看看有没有语法错误,能打多少分
I want to do something for my school
How time flies!I'm going to graduate from my school before long.Since i'm a student,i should do something for my school.I've noticed that the library of my school hasn't enough books to enjoy ever since i first came into the school.Sometimes a few students had no choice but to read one book with another student.I like reading ,so i have a lot of books ,including some useless ones.I think it's my duty to donate these books for my school ,they will be helpful to many younger students.

提问时间：2021-04-15

答案

I've noticed that the library of my school hasn't enough books
这一句,应该是doesn't have 而不是hasn't
语法错误就这么一个,但是有很多地方的遣词用句需要改进,否则会严重影响文采分.如果不加以修改,这篇文章可以打15分（3分扣在：1分语法错误,2分文采）
had no choice but to read one book with another student.
"read“改成"share"
I like reading , so i have a lot of books,including some useless ones.
改成"I like reading and I have a plenty of books that I no longer need"
I think it's my duty to donate these books for my school
改成"I think I could a little favor for my school, donating these books. " （duty这个词太重了,你对学校没有那样严肃的义务责任关系,所以改成favor会好很多）
they will be helpful to many younger students
改成"I believe that they'll be beneficial to many younger students"