题目

改雅思作文,
Is schooling more important than parenting?
In the contemporary society,education,to a great extent,decides one’s entire life.As we all know,there are all two approaches,from which everyone of us receive education,namely parenting and schooling.While this becomes a subject of hot debate --- does schooling have more influence on an individual’s well-being than parenting?
It makes no sense to say that parenting is of less importance in comparison to schooling.It may be true that students will not acquire any knowledge from books at home.But certainly they will learn something such as courtesy or distinguishing from right and wrong,which is not covered in school materials.In fact,children being in their impressionable age tend to change their minds with surroundings,and the significance of home schooling thereby appears to be conspicuous,for instance,educating children to keep away from obscene or potentially damaging prints.
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提问时间：2021-03-29

答案

扫了一眼,写得不错的.如果要改,找老师去,网上打字说不清楚的.
我看了下,高分的几个因素都具备的,但里面的复杂句,是为了用从句而从句,很生硬的英文,这个自己体会.看下来是一篇不错文章的.