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i have a best friend,his name is Tom.he is also my classmate and we have been in the same class for three years.he is handsome boy from Canada and he is tall and strong.he wears glasses that make him look so gentle.he has many good personalities,such as easy-going,creative and so on.last term,he was the host of the English corner and he is good at football so he joined the school football team.Although he has many strong points,he also has some shorycomings,for example he like eating junk food and he has a spending problem.i hope that he can change his shortcomings,the doing more exercise,and don't waste his money anymore,I believe that he will become more popular than now.

提问时间：2021-03-27

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i have a best friend,his name is Tom.  (a best friend is wrong)


I have a friend called Tom, who is one of best friends.



he is also my classmate and we have been in the same class for three years.

He is also my classmate and we have been in the same class for three years.



he is handsome boy from Canada and he is tall and strong.

He is a handsome boy from Canada and he is tall and strong.




he wears glasses that make him look so gentle.

He wears glasses that make him look so gentle.




he has many good personalities,such as easy-going,creative and so on.

He has many good personalities,such as easy-going and creative.




last term,he was the host of the English corner and he is good at football so he joined the school football team.

Last term,he was the host of the English corner. 

He is good at football so he has joined the football team of the school.




Although he has many strong points, he also has some shorycomings, for example he like eating junk food and he has a spending problem.



Although he has many strong points, he has  some shortcomings, for example he like 
eating junk food and he has a problem managing his spend.



i hope that he can change his shortcomings,the doing more exercise,and don't waste his money anymore,I believe that he will become more popular than now.



I hope that he can get rid of his shortcomings, do more exercise and 

not to waste his money anymore.



I believe that he will become more popular than now.

I believe he will become more popular among classmates than now.