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I think the biggest risk is no more than making a decision which may determine a person’s fate (my value).Since two years ago I was attracted by astronomy,my fate has already communicated with the subject,even though my family didn’t hope so.Of course I knew no prize of it could take me to an ideal university,and in China it would be hard to find a job.But psychologically I felt called from the Heaven.Angels seemed to say “Come on Nicholas,so magical space is waiting for you to explore.” In another word,I’d like to be a pioneer for unknown force.
In truth I have been impacted greatly by the contests of astronomy and friends far apart.They showed their local customs and their distinctive characters which impressed my heart.There is always someone better when comparing.In my city,our lives keep boring.No colorful games,few public activities held by organizations,no Haagen-Dazs…Just work,operation and exercise.Such a developing capital stays in a developed province.So

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第二段 第三行-》when compared with第六行-》search website第三段第三行-》I don’t think I lack of ability感觉很不通顺……是从中文通过金山翻译过来的吗?先把中文的内容想好吧……读了好几遍都感觉没重点,就是...