题目

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假如你是李华。你的两位朋友Tom与Peter几天前发生了争吵。3月9日是Peter生日，Tom想送他一个礼物来缓和关系，修复友情，特地发来邮件寻求你的建议。请你根据以下要点给Tom回一封邮件：
1．礼物选择：
2．你的理由；
3．其它和解建议。
注意：
1．词数100左右：
2．可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯：
3．开头和结尾己给出，不计入总词数。
Dear Tom,
I"m glad to hear that you are considering making up with Peter．
                                                                                      
Best wishes,
Li Hua

答案

a possible version：
Dear Tom,
I’m glad to hear that you are considering making up with Peter. If I were you, I would consider a bike as a birthday present for him.
As far as I know, Peter is always in poor health so he can take more exercise by riding a bike to build up his body. In the meanwhile, you can often go outing by bike together, which is helpful to rebuild your friendship. Besides, taking a bike is an environmentally-friendly means of transport. It’s convenient for him to get around as well.
Apart from giving him a gift, you can also adopt other means, such as travelling, seeing a movie, having dinner and going shopping. No matter what you do, being sincere is the most important. I really hope that we can be good friends forever.
Best wishes,
Li Hua

解析

试题分析：本文要求写一封邮件，同学们对此形式非常熟悉，内容也和学生的生活联系密切，所以写起来应该是得心应手，写作时应注意的问题是：一、仔细审题，写邮件的目的是就道歉的事情寻求建议，所以内容要围绕三个要点展开。二、在写邮件时要开门见山提出写信的目的，就本文而言要首先表明自己对礼物的建议。三、在篇章结构方面，要注意层次性和逻辑性，尤其是在解释理由方面，可以使用一些表示层次的连词，如firstly、secondly、besides、what’s more等。四、在语言方面，要简洁明了，尽量使用多种句式结构以提高文章档次。
【亮点说明】本篇书面表达要点全面，层次清晰。开头用虚拟语气的句子委婉地提出了自己的建议。在解释原因和提出其他建议时，作者用到了as far as I know 、in the meanwhile 、besides、apart from等词汇和短语，使段落非常具有层次性，而且还用到了定语从句which is helpful to rebuild your friendship.状语从句Peter is always in poor health so he can take more exercise by riding a bike to build up his body，No matter what you do, being sincere is the most important. I really hope that we can be good friends forever.等复合句，显示了作者对句型结构的准确把握，成为了文章的亮点。