题目

请各位能不能看看我的IELTS作文能有5.
There are social,medical and technical problems associated with the use of mobile phones.What froms do they take?Do you agree that the problems outweigh the benefits of the mobile phone?
In modern society with the rapid development of science and technology.Mobile phones are more important than used to be.At the same time mant problems associated with the use of moblie phones so that people in growing numbers agree that the problems outweigh the benefits of mobile phone.In my opinion.I disagree with this this point of view for three reasons.
My first reason is that mobile phones bridge the information gap to each other.There is no doubt that mobile phones are far more convenient and efficient than the written letters or made telegarms.At this satge,nothing is more qualitative and quantitative than to use mobile phones.It costs methree days to wait a letter from the other city.But it costs me three seconds to receive a message from the other country.提问时间：2021-03-21

答案

我觉得差不多可以 可是有几点不足需要注意:1 段落分析很明确 但是每段开头需要适当的变换句式 总用一个句形是不利于提分的 2 文章中有些许拼写错误 不知道是你 打的时候打错了 还是拼写不知道,这个在考试的时候尤其...