题目

请英语高手帮我点评这篇四级作文,
1 现在电视上充斥着各种选秀节目
2 选秀节目流行的原因
3 你的观点
Talent Show on TV
Nowadays,with the developing economy,more and more people pay their attention to the entertainment.In this situation,all kinds of talent shows are appeared on TV.\There are two reasons why talent shows become so popular in the following.
First,people become richer so they have encough money not only to the eat and warmth,but also to the entertainment.In the morden world,the person work so hard to earn money that they need to relax themselves sometimes.The appearance of the talent shows fit their need.Moreover,the teens in this time are more interest in the talent shows.They are so active that they spend a lot of time on all kinds of shows.More and more teens are absorbed in the talent shows,so the shows become more and more popular.
As far as I'm concerned,I like to watch the talent shows on TV.I think it is very comfortable.The talent shows are good for the teens in my mind.The shows always hold on summer or winter days so the students can play a part on them because they also have a long holiday at the same time.They can entertain themselves after a long time study and also can learn a lot of things through the shows.

提问时间：2021-03-19

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