题目

我写的2010安徽高考英语作文
安徽英语书面表达（满分25分）
假如你将参加某英语杂志社开展的一次征文活动,征文的内容要求你在电视、手机(cell)和网络三考中,放弃其中一个并陈述理由.请你以“Which would you give the TV,cell,or Web”为题,写一篇英语短文.
注意：
1.字数100左右；
2.可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯.
Which would you give up:TV,cell,or Web?
Nowadays,TV,cell,and Web are very common in our daily life.If I have to choose one to give up,I will choose the cell.
I think as middle school students,we don't need the cell in that we don't have many people to contact.In addition,masses of rubbish short messages spread through the cell,disturbing our studying.Moreover,there are a great deal of bad information on some mobile phone websites,which is harmful to our mental health.I also notice that some students are addicted to sending short messages during the class.
However,I believe that TV and Web are both useful.For instance,we can get the latest news through TV in time,and only by surfing the Internet can we gain some knowledge that cannot be learned in the class.
To sum it up,I'd rather give up the cell.
按照满分25分打个分,并评价一下,

提问时间：2020-12-24

答案

看了一遍,觉得你的主要问题是语句不通顺 （不是说语法不对,就是这么用着有点别扭）.还有一个就是词汇还不够,在我看来用词比较简单,缺少可以为你加分的深度.这两个可能就是你得了18的原因；但我觉得你的整体结构啊什...