题目

英语作文,稍作更改.
Hello everybody.I’m very glad that I can show myself to you.
I’m a lively girl .Call me Iris.This year I’ll become 13.My favorite color is black.I think it is mystery.So I like wolves.They are a little unpredictable.I like sweet too,like:candies,ice cream……
I’m a student in Middle school now.In the three years of future,I’ll study hard,try my best!If you want deep understand me,We can make friends!
不要再改长了,最好再删几个词.哪段的长短可以改改.就今晚,给答案追分.今晚没有就关.

提问时间：2020-11-09

答案

学校再具体些用at
表述的不太全面应多介绍一下关于自己的喜好之类
我喜欢你的有关理想,总之这篇作文还不错,语法对了就差不多了