题目

The volume of property transactions in District Muar had shown increasing from year 2005 to 2007.In year 2007,the volume of transaction recorded in District Muar was 6692 which shows an increase of 11.05% compared to 2006.However,the volume of residential properties transaction increased by 30.61% to 2082 as compared to 1570 in 2006.
District Muar is the second highest number of overhang residential properties in State Johor after District Johor Bahru.The number of overhang residential properties in District Muar had shows increasing from year 2005 to 2007.In Q4 2007,the number of overhang residential properties in District Muar was 1320 which shows an increase of 10% from the previous quarter.This situation appears because the increased volume of supply in District Muar was higher than increased demand.

提问时间：2020-11-03

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The volume of property transactions in District Muar had increased (shown
increasing) from year 2005 to 2007.In year 2007,the volume of transaction
recorded in District Muar was 6692,which showed (shows) an increase of
11.05% compared to 2006.However(1),the volume of residential properties
transactions (transaction) increased by 30.61% to 2082 as compared to 1570
in 2006.
District Muar had (is) the second highest number of overhang residential
properties in State Johor after District Johor Bahru.The number of overhang
residential properties in District Muar had increased (shows increasing)
from year 2005 to 2007.In Q4 2007,the number of overhang residential properties
in District Muar was 1320,which showed (shows) an increase of 10% from
the previous quarter.This situation appeared (appears) because the increased
volume of supply in District Muar was higher than increased demand.
其实主要是时式方面的掌握
所提及的数据都是2007年或以前的
所以用过去时比较合当
(1)看看是否可以用Moreover或其他的字用代替However
如果是按图表的写作
内容清楚
比较的用词掌握的不错