题目

麻烦帮我检查一下英语的错误吧
修改前
、2.This student respects teachers in school,and she always bows to teachers to show her respect.In class,she is highly praised and supported by teachers and students.
She is a child always wearing bright smiles,infecting people around her.She has innocent,optimistic,steady,generous characters,and actively participates in group activities.
In school life,she cherishes class honor,and she is always ready to assist the other students to solve the problems,humbly accepting teacher's points and being praised by the teachers and students.

提问时间：2020-10-18

答案

2.xxx respects teachers in school; she always greets teachers with bows.She brings positive influences to people around her with her bright never-fading smiles.She actively participates in group activities,cherishes class honor,and is always ready to assist the other students with their problems.She accepts praises from the teachers and students with modesty.xxx is a student with outstanding traits such as optimism,generosity,steadiness,and so on.
原文其实没有什么明显的语法错误,但语言显得生硬,结构也有些零乱.
做了较大修改,看看这样语言是否简洁些,行文是否紧凑流畅些?
另外,除了形容幼童,innocent不宜作为褒义词使用.因为已有多个形容词了,我便将其直接删除了.
还有,文中的xxx请改为该学生的姓名.如果是用于极正式的场合,除第一次提到时用全句外,后面可只用姓.如果不是非常正式的,可以只用名.不用每次都写全名.英语中几乎见不到用“this student”的.