题目

can someone help me with my poem?
this is again a poem of mine written in my creative writing class.and once again i gotta mentioned that i am not good at English,and don't even know how to write a poem,but not articles.
this poem is about my Dad's death
the day you left home,
it was the last time we met on earth,
you had raise me up
for 14 years
and I hadn't paid for you love yet
you were sick in hospital
far away from home
I never had the chance
to visit you
but heard your voice really sick on phone
I held my tears every time we talked
because I believe you would be home
recover and health
3 months passed
you were home
but with a death body
i blamed on you
you had promised me
you would be back home alive
you broke you words
but i did not have chance
no more to forgave you
I love you DAD.
I want someone help me to correct this poem.not to translate it into Chinese.
Thank you

提问时间：2020-10-13

答案

这是一首诗再次书面地雷在我创作类.我再次提到的爱,我不擅长英语,甚至不知道如何写一首诗,而不是文章. 这首诗是我父亲的死亡 一天你离开了家, 这是我们最后一次会见了地球上, 你提高我 14年 和我没有支付你爱尚 你生...