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哪位英语好的,帮忙看一下这篇文章的语法和拼写错误.
When people think of summer,they think "hot." Well,it really is.The strong sunshine and high temperatures make you sweat all day.On such hot days,a glass of ice water may not quite satisfy your needs,so why not try some ice cream?And today my topic is “ice cream”.
To this day,the history of ice cream remains a mystery.However,many say that the first ice cream is credited to Emperor Nero of Rome.It was a mixture of snow,nectar,fruit pulp,and honey.Others proclaim that Marco Polo,a 13th century adventurer,brought ice cream to Europe from the Far East.
Compared with years before,new types of ice cream turn up every summer.Ice cream is no longer just a mix consisting of milk products,sugar,corn syrup,and flavoring.It may also contain egg products,stabilizers,emulsifiers,and other ingredients derived from non-milk substances.So today ice cream has a lot of taste,such as :chocolate ice cream,strawberry ice cream ,milk ice cream and so on.However,the favorite flavor may be the classic vanilla.Then comes chocolate,strawberry,Neapolitan,and chocolate chip.
with more and more ice cream shops all around,there are many places offering a cool and quiet place to enjoy your ice cream.Let's take a look.
Haagen Dazs
This is one of the most famous ice cream brands and has become
quite popular in China's big cities like Beijing and Shanghai.
The nice decorations and quiet environment make up for such
high prices.
Baskin-Robbins
This ice cream chain came to China in 1993.The Chinese name for
Baskin-Robbins is "31 ice creams," boasting the fact that they
can offer you a different flavor every day of the month.Each
Baskin-Robbins has the same simple design,but this certainly
does not affect the taste.
TCBY
TCBY stands for "The Country's Best Yogurt," and is an
American brand selling soft and frozen yogurt and ice cream.
Mondo Gelato and TIAMO Offers Italian ice cream.
Valentino
Valentino is a chocolate shop,but to people that visit often,
the ice cream is most attractive.Although the variety of ice
cream is limited,the flavor is outstanding.
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提问时间：2020-08-08

答案

第一段：第一句：最好改为：What do people think of summer?They may say,it's too hot,and it's a true.第二句：可改用复句（可丰富文章语言）The sunshine is so strong and the temperature is so high that mak...