题目

Why more and more people choose to goaboard for your further study?I am thinking about this question recently.Underthe condition of I have the ability to go out smoothly,what benefits can I getfrom it?
Firstly,it will be a good opportunity forme to contact western culture and expand my horizon.Furthermore,it may contributeto thought collision.
Secondly,going aboard can makes me enableto live on my own.Without parents surround me,I must handle all the things independently.
Last but not least,we may gain much possibility,which is advantageous for my work and life in the future.
有没有语法问题或者句式词汇可以有更好地代替的?求指导!

提问时间：2020-08-01

答案

Why people in a increasing number choose to go aboard for their further study? I have been thinking about this question for a long time .even if I got the chance to do so,will that really benefits me in the long run?Firstly, it may be a good opportunity for me to get in contact with the western culture and therefore expand my horizon.Secondly, going aboard will enable me to stand on my own feet, without parents around, I shall handle everything independently.What's more,there will be numerous oppotunity ,in which I may found my ideal ones.
There also may be some disadvantages ,first,if I can't deal with the differences,I may have a Culture Shock.Secondly,the life in another country will be uneasy,and then I may feel homesick.Evenworse,if I spent plenty of time there but still can't get into their circle,I may lose my confidence and feel like a looser.
结尾自己想吧,并没有弄清你到底是支持还是否定,最后一定要有明确态度的.