题目

麻烦高人看看我这篇短文有多少语法错误,结构错误,用词错误.麻烦改详细些,我会加分的.
Glance at the graph provided show the demand for electricity in England during typical days in winter and summer. The pie chart concerning the information of English home used electricity.
According to the graph, we can see clearly that English home in winter consume electricity high than summer (the winter always above 30,000). Electricity consumption fluctuates during 0hrs to 12hrs. Electricity is used by English home at 2hrs what reach 40,000. And at 9hrs, it drop to 30,000. The consumption of electricity rise slowly from 38,000 to 41,000 at afternoon. At night, the electricity consumption is the maximum in all day. It soars rapidly from 41,000 to 45,000 during 19hrs and 23hrs. An ultimate one clock in all day ,it plunge dramatically down 35,000.
Let we look at the second curve of this graph. It indicate that the information of the English home consume electricity in summer. It different from the winter’s curve, it have not hu

提问时间：2020-07-22

答案

前面的我是在原文基础上改的,括号的是需要修正的.后面太乱了,就直接改了.你对照一下原文就知道了.Glance at the graph provided （which) (原句里有glance,show两个动词,语法上错误,加上which,把它变成了从句）shows...