题目

求 帮我修改一下雅思作文
As a great mind once said life is a process of pursuiting happiness.of course everyone would ask himself what the happiness it is.Both of us are willing to devote all our life to this career.Howerer.I believe it is very difficult to spot a common answer for these question ,Because everyone has his own norm in his mind.
I suppose ,obviously whether we consider our life to be happiness largely depend on where we have been brough up.for the simple reaseon that differernt areas have different life habbits for instance if you lived in south of China you may regard fish as a delicacy.on the country if you lived in north you stomatch would turn at the sight of fish.the second point i should mention is love.Living with your love is also an essential part of happiness.It has been siad that comparing with people who had got married the rate of sudden died is quite lower than those who had never married.thirdly the element of happiness also included powerful career.in particular for the male.you kown ,they must undertake the duty of the family .
From what i have discussed above you can find love .career.suitable liftstyle are the main points of happiness life however,sometimes Hard realistic may not give your right to choose you life style.Perhaps you may feel dismay if you are in economic crisis.but I still believe everyone 's life can be very meaningful.as long as you can put your mind in it .

提问时间：2021-03-31

答案

6分 ,if you lived in north you stomatch would turn at the sight of fish.胃stomach 这句怎么俩动词.有些句子看不懂,不过套句用的多,说理过于简单,我认为有点牵强,