题目

雅思作文,求点评.
Some people think it is necessary to punish children in order to teach them the difference between right and wrong.Do you agree or disagree?
Because of an old saying ‘spare the rod and spoil the child’,some individuals believe that punishment is essential for children’s wellbeing as it teaches them to distinguish the right and the wrong.Overall,one could disagree with such an opinion.
Firstly,punishments,especially physical ones,are against the Federal Law.In the light of the law,it is clearly argued that anyone,including children’s parents,will face up to 20 years jail if they have used punitive measures to penalise the young individuals.For instance,a primary school teacher had been arrested in 2009 and the Federal Police found that he had utilized certain illegal matters to castigate his students because those students had not completed their homework.
Secondly,corporal punishment and verbal punishment are not good methods to teach teenagers as these may fu

提问时间：2021-03-29

答案

Because of ——-There is /As
one could disagree --some would disagree
such an opinion--还是a opinion or opinion?
it could be suggested --it is