题目

大家帮忙看看我的雅思作文 谢谢
人类生活水平的下降的原因和解决办法,都是我自己写的,能有5分么?自己写作真心不好.我不会再低了吧?
In the contemproary world,the quality of life in some large cities is becoming worse In my point of my view, there are various reason behind the phenomenon.
To begin with,The invention of new technology brought pollution while improving people’s live.The emission from industries and agriculture are the main cause of air pollution which could the most serious problem in our world. That lead to ozonosphere to be thinned and our body would hurt by the Uv ray. Nowadays the cancer and various disease pose threat to human being. Moveover,with the increasing of population,government always put some chemical and fertilizer to the field in order to enable people to live well. Yet,it is not beneficial to our fitness. As a result , the soil will be damaged and the quality of the food cannot be guaranteed.
Some measures must be taken to solve this kind of serious problem,which is not only to the government,but also i

提问时间：2021-03-23

答案

有语法错误.还有有些句子有累赘之感.最后一段没有太多总结的意义,反而降低了你整体的写作效果
4.5分的程度吧