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高手帮我批改一下这篇英语作文
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One day I was about to go outside to play when I saw my mother being busy with several housework at the same time.She looked so tired,and I felt guilty,Therefore I made a determination to share housework with her.I was about to wash the clothes when my friend called me up and asked me to play with her.I told her that I would go on the condition that completing my washing.Then I go on washing ,Only then did I realized it was such a tiring thing to wash clothes,and how tired my mother was.While my mother not only worked outside but also took the responsibility of our housework inside,she never complaint to us.After washing I felt tired though ,my mother praised me ,and said that I was a good child.I felt happy.

提问时间：2021-03-04

答案

minking做的很好的一点是,想办法用好句式和词组.但是怎么用似乎还需要学习.整个文章里的标点符号用的不太好,似乎都是逗号?需要学会断句,和正确使用标点.以下提出我的建议:1.第一句里being去掉.busy with可以直接加在...