题目

我是大二英文专业的
My View of Linsanity
Linsanity,a new word which implies an ethnic Chinese basketball player,now is the most popular word in the word.Setting various messages aside,I consider him as ambitious and conscientious.
At first,Linsanity was originally looked down upon by people around for he is a player with yellow face.But he never allows him being wrong in the gym.When he just entered NBA,he was always to be a candidate in a game.He barely attracted other’s attention until his chief coach Smart couldn’t bear ignoring his diligent.Smart ever said Lin always goes to the gym very earlier and communicate with him positively.All his efforts contributed to his first new-season show in NBA in which he got the highest score.After that,his click statistic remains a huge number and was even well-received by president Obama.
Secondly,Lin has an enviable education background—Harvard graduate.However,he obeyed the common sense that working in the Wall Street and living a comfortable life.Lin chose to play basketball.He enjoys what basketball gives him even it is so hard and stressful.
When asked about Lin’s wish now,this modest young man said he just want to be himself and hopes he won’t change anything except for his technique.I sincerely support him and have faith in his future success.

提问时间：2021-01-17

答案

1、“ I consider him as ambitious and conscientious. ”这句应该为.as an ambitious and conscientious person. 这样才完整,符合的consider ...as...用法.
2、“But he never allows him being wrong in the gym. ”这句中的 him 改为 himslef 更好些.
3、"He barely attracted other’s attention until his chief coach Smart couldn’t bear ignoring his diligent. " 这句中的 other's 应该为 others' ,diligent 应该为 diligence
4、第六行末尾处communicate应加s
5、第八行的was应改为is
6、"he obeyed the common sense that working in the Wall Street and living a comfortable life. " 这句中的that后面应加 is,构成完整的定语从句.
7、"He enjoys what basketball gives him even it is so hard and stressful."将even改为though,意为“尽管”
8、倒数第三行中want 应加s
以上仅仅是我个人观点,只供参考