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学到的知识比创造力更有利于个人成功
Success,a magic word,which is always highlysought-after by many people .Both knowledge and creativity is a necessary elements to succeed,if given the choice,I tend to agree that creativity is of great importance to be successful.
It is not surprisingly that individuals who possess wide and profound knowledge have more possibilities to find a position this competitive society.In my parents generation,people who graduated from universities were able to find good jobs certainly in my country.since the majority of people who were not received higher education could only work in manual jobs.On the contrary,things have changed dynamically currently.In view of an increasing number of university students rushing into market,people who have the similar education background and capability makes job finding more difficult than in the past.
Being creative can excel yourself out among ordinary people and find your own path to success.Comparing with know

提问时间：2021-01-16

答案

作者词汇基本功很好,学术词汇表达也比较恰当；作者应适量增加从句的使用量；全文结构较为严谨,应适当增加文中衔接词的使用.