题目

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In recent years,many young people decide to further their study abroad.Do you think the advantages of study abroad outweigh its disadvantages?
Every morning we open our eyes,we found that we born in this rapidly changing society,in particular,in terms of working and studying etc.if you are an aficionado of the studying abroad “debate”,you have probably read at one time or another that current trends in this controversy shows that there is two opinions in this question,which is treat him as the angel,and other individuals think him is the demon.The way I see it,I am totally agree with this point which is think he is the angel.
Studying abroad may create substantial benefits.To begin with,this practice can help foster a strong sense of achievement in many students when they had fulfilled their school work.Secondly,it is not unrealistic that studying abroad could widen their knowledge and broaden their outlook.Technically,studying abroad could bring far-reac

提问时间：2021-01-11

答案

第一段话可以全部删掉.少用双重否定句.文章里用了很多很有学问的词,但是堆在一起不知道想要表达什么.这是我看到的第二篇写同样主题的作文.很有意思的一点,两篇都有很类似的观点,就是出国深造以后可以有更好的就业机...