题目

求帮忙评价一下托福作文打个分~
Do you agree or disagree with the followingstatement:
Students are more influenced by their teachersthan by their friends.
Since teachers are frequently called metaphoricallygardeners,it seems that this statement do makes sense.However I hold a firmview that students are more likely to be affected by their friends based onreasons follow.
Firstly,the length of time of getting onwith students is fundamental for influence.Apparently,students only have opportunitiesto get along with teachers during class with most of these time concerning textbook,exam and so forth.When it comes to friends,however,things are different.Friends company each other nearly every minute in the whole day especially for students.For example,a student might be influenced by his friends while they hang outaround the school,eat lunch together or more often,take a class together.Thus,how could a teacher compare a whole day companied friend?
Secondly,it is much easier for students to

提问时间：2021-01-03

答案

楼上也太敷衍了吧.
各种空格没打不是什么大问题,但比如“this statement do makes sense”就不该出现,应为“does make sense”.
无论句号逗号后面都必须有空格.
如果你认为第三点最重要,那就把它放在第一点的位置.（其实为觉得第一点和第三点差别不大,你可以合并他们再加一个反方观点）
如果我打分的话,按你综合写作满分算,应该写作是24左右.