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With the development of the pace of the modern age,technology embodies its more and more important authority gradually.And it is not only seeds in our daily life at home ,but also the academic study.For one reason is that people can not live smoothly without technology.Devoloping the technology,howere,from my standpoint,is not only depending on persons’ creative ideas,but also relying upon the money invested to some extent.
Nowadays,people gradually learn about the significance of the Internet which is seeding person’s life deeply in this era.Because of the importance of the technology taking computer as the representative,people pay a lot of attentions on investing computer systems everywhere,such as university library.
I prefer to using money to buy computers rather than just buying books in this golden age of Internet.As far as I am concerned,learning to use computer fluently is more vital than gainning information by reading books.The most importan

提问时间：2021-01-02

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分我是不太会估,满分 6分的话,我估计 3.5-4分.提点建议和努力的方向吧,1.整体来说语法错误有点多,句型有重复的,2.建议复杂词的词义不清楚的情况下多用简单词,一些词的词义有混淆.3.整篇文章逻辑上不够紧凑.4.少用插...