题目

帮忙批改一下雅思大作文~~~~~~~
麻烦哪位帮我批改一下雅思大作文,我基础比较差,肯定有很多错误,请解释的稍微详细一点,告诉我属于哪方面的错误.非常感谢!
Dose modern technology make life more convenient, or was life better when technology was simpler ?
What is your opinion?
Whether modern technology has really brought a lot of conveniences to our lives? Some people think that modern technology has made their working and living more easy and fast. But other people may actually answer to the contrary, that it is precisely the products of modern technology has made their lives more complicated and difficult. Personally I think the former is more convincing.
The obvious advantages of modern-day technologies are many. Firstly, unsurprisingly, the developed transportation network can quickly take you to any place you wish. For example, if you is planning a trip, there are so many kinds of vehicle for your choice, even it is spaceplane. Besides, a lot of great modern inventions has brought people much closer, such as the Internet, mobile phones,

提问时间：2020-11-20

答案

此篇作文的topic是谈论现代科学技术对生活的影响,并要求给出自己的观点.一.1.第一段,呼应题目,按正反两方面论证,并在最后给出自己的观点,很好!通篇的思路也不错,虽然不新颖,但是稳就是高分的基础!文章抛开语法错误(...