题目

托福综合写作作文 求批改 求拍~求给意见~· TPO2的综合写作
According to the listening material,the man claims that group work can not bring the advances stated by the reading passage.Equipped with lots of demerits,working as a team remains not being considered by him.To give evidence to support his concept,the lecturer demonstrates several standpoints.
Initially,the lecturer puts emphasis on that the group is as a whole,meaning,no individuals will be mentioned when the group achieves success.But some of the group members had devoted themselves to the task,while some of them did no contribution to it.No wonder that this kind of phenominum is universal,and it is an abstract of unfair treatment.However,the reading material insists that the individiual team members are endowed with much better chances to show themselves.
Besides,there must be no posibility for the group to make a response quickly,for more time is required to make an final agreement on some issues than making the decisions by one's own,when people in the group are willing to get a 'freeride'.On the contrary,the reading passage take it for granted that team work can save time since every one in the team will let his or her understanding contribute to timely responses and highly creative solutions.
Finnally,based on the drawbacks given above,the team owns more posibility to get a failure instead of success,which the reading passage supported the team to get.At that time,the lecturer argues,the whole team would be blamed even if some of them have nothing to do with the unpleasant outcome.

提问时间：2020-11-20

答案

According to the listening material,the man asserts the group members can not be achieved the performance by reading passage.To equipped with lots of demerits that team is not be made decision by only one person.To give evidence to support his concept,the lecturer gives several standpoints.
Initially,the lecturer puts emphasis on that the group is as a whole.He means that no individual will be mentioned if the group achieves success.Although some of the group members work really hard,some of them do not work hard.And this kind of thing is very normal,so it is an abstract of unfair treatment.
The reading material insists that the individual are endowed with much better chances to show themselves.
Besides,there must be no possibility for the group to make a response quickly.Because everyone is willing to get a 'freeride' so they need more time to make an agreement on some issues and then make the decisions.On the contrary,the reading passage takes it for granted that team work can save time,people will let each other understand that contribution is the highly creative solution to achieve the performance.
Finally,based on the drawbacks have been given above; the team has more chance to get failure,which is against the reading material.At last,the lecturer probably thinks the whole team should blame those people who have done nothing.
你的论文我看的很云里雾里,只能做到这样了,改动比较大谢谢.